I’m late. Two weeks late. I was supposed to have already turned in the first chapter of my book on the beatitudes to a publisher. I’m being perfectionistic I know and time’s been scarce with the live CD and new web site to oversee. But I’ve had a minor breakthrough that has me really liking writing this book again, and that makes me move faster.
I’ve had a hard time putting meaty theological content in with the lighter stories I think shed some light on the theological points I’m making and give a break to readers before they have to dive back into the next deep section. The problem has been transitioning between the two. So I decided to separate them entirely, to create bloglike sections, posts with their own character and function. No transitions needed – most of the time.
But then I worried about the stories being all the same approximate length. They weren’t. I’m just OCD enough for that to bother me. And I wasted a week beefing one story in particular up with extra details and adjectives and walked away frustrated.
The breakthrough was making myself tell the story without worrying about length. The story is what the story is, even if it’s half a page and the next one is three. So here’s the story I muttled up with fluff in it’s much more concise form:
Mrs. Grandberry smelled like desert and flowers. Her tan skin dimpled at the corners of her mouth and wrinkled around the edges of her eyes when she smiled, which was almost always.
I had a small crush on Mrs.Granberry, who seemed more like a tall kid than an actual adult. It was her first year of teaching and the administration and the parents and their children and the coming boredom of lessons a thousand times taught hadn’t drained the joy from her face or the color from her hair yet. She was new and all grins.
I especially loved Mrs. Grandberry at art time. She strolled throughout the grid of first grade desks patting us gently on the shoulder as she cooed encouragements. “That’s a handsome snowman, Amy. I just love his scarf. I’d wear a scarf that nice wouldn’t you?”
I was after Amy on her rounds.
Mrs. Grandberry leaned over my chair to admire a single doily I’d glued to a blue piece of paper. “It’s a snow flake,” I smiled.
“It’s a special little snow flake,” she whispered, “Just like you.” Her dimples appeared and her finger flicked my nose playfully. And I promise I heard a tiny “ding” as a twinkle twirled for an instant in her squinty delighted eyes.
Grovesfan says:
Very visual. I can see her clearly as she inspires and encourages. I had a third grade teacher just like that, except that she was elderly. Spunky, full of life, strict, and a wonderful mentor. I went into teaching to be just like her!
Beth
Aims says:
Yeah when writing it’s hard to do things like chapters. When I write I think “Is chapter 1 too short?” Chapter 1 is usually only 2 pages front and back depending on how I print it. So yeah you’ve kinda gotta get over the whole gotta make a chapter longer kinda thing because it can really be a bummer if you know you should have left something alone. And sometimes as a reader you can tell when someone is just throwing something in there to add to it.
But yeah good stuff. Can’t wait to read it. This is what you’re 2nd…3rd…5th book you’ve said you’ve been writing?
Loren says:
great short, “I had a small crush on Mrs.Granberry” and this “I especially loved Mrs. Grandberry at art time” seem a bit redundant seeing as they are intros to different thoughts, but then again it ties them together…just some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, from a non-writer…well there are my prestigious church newsletter articles
Shaun Groves says:
It’s the same book. Just the seventh start. ; )
Thanks, Loren. I’ll look at that.
Aims says:
Ahhhh 7th try, nice. You’re really trying hard on this aren’t you? A tip or 2:
Don’t strain yourself. Just let it flow from your fingers onto the page…or computer…you’re using your Mac aren’t you? Maybe you should try using notebook paper.
Don’t analyze what you write too much or you’ll annihilate it and then you’ll be working on your 8th attempt.
Call it as you see it and don’t forget that just because it looks huge on your computer paper your book will more than likely be using smaller paper therefore more pages. An example…one of my books I’ve typed on this computer is 51 pages long given the normal default settings in word. I change the page setup to Landscape and put the book into 2 columns to make it look like it’s a book and when you print it out you have 102 pages on 51 sheets of printer paper.
Course you already know let someone else read over your work even if you feel embarassed by it.
Okay I was just re-reading through the story and found this…
It was her first year of teaching and the administration and the parents and their children and the coming boredom of lessons a thousand times taught hadn’t drained the joy from her face or the color from her hair yet.
It sounds like there are too many ands in that sentence. You may wanna try….
It was her first year of teaching and the administration, the parents, their children, and the coming boredom of lessons a thousand times taught hadn’t drained the joy from her face or the color from her hair yet.
Lisa says:
Hey, see when this book comes out (?)! Will it be on sale where I come from? I live in Northern Ireland and I would love to read it, so would I be able to buy it just from a bible and book shop?
Home Security Service says:
Very nice post and comments
golf camps says:
Just like you, I loved this book.